New Audio. Dead Presidents

My boy Wally and I going in on Dead Presidents.
Any and all thoughts/criticism are welcome.
http://www.mediafire.com/?6cnabohy5uiwsp3


Enjoy

Question which one was you? lol even though both were pretty good.
Your mic was clipping a bit and your audio level was a bit degraded but I enjoyed it for what it was worth.
you were having fun drinking beers with your boy just kicking it and I dig that.
Great lyrics and delivery was on most of the time. I feel where your coming from though.
I'm still working on mine to get better. all I can say is Practice, Practice, Practice, all the time.
In the shower, on the radio, over mixed instumentals, even when you sleep. lol
Even reading through the dictionary to boost your vocab's not a bad Idea. most emcee's do this to only get better.
Haven’t seen you on here in a while bro...nice to have you back. Stay up Tre. on a further note.
Molo and I just finished up the finals. and we need some votes homie. I think I might have sent you a PM on this.

Oh yeah my bad man, I post this at like 6 in the morning so I didn't write the lyrics down or specify who was who. The first one was Wally and the second one was me. We recorded it on a MacBook mic so that's why the quality was kinda sh1tty. Good look on the advice though, that's what I've been doin for a few weeks. I used to just write, but now I flow all of my sh1t as well. I feel like once I post the lyrics and make word play notes on this, it might be more appreciated? haha Idk. I've been really busy thats why I haven't been on here in a while; college man smh haha. And I'll put my vote in, in a bit, gotta go to class and what not at the moment. There will be audio every now, so be on the lookout for that. Peace though man

Yeah, too bad the quality sucks, I love it. I love the lyrics and the flow, props to you & Wally !

Haha thanks Molo, we are gonna re-record it with a quality mic within the next couple days so look for that.

Lyrics and word play notes:

1.I got girls like a yo-yo, so when I say "aye ***", they know to fall in like white snow
2.Just so they can say, "yo, I hung with Trigga Tre just the other day, and he made me feel like sh1ts gettin real.."
but listen,
3.It's just a spiel, so I can seal the deal and not cop a feel when your just in heels
4.like bust and peel; out the parking lot
5.Barking with my dawgs from the bark we bought from Bob Barker's yacht.
6.But Timba Tre turned to Trigga Tre murking tricks for loads of sticky sticks today.
7.I stick figures with quick fingers so bring yer slim figures to Tre this way
8.or expect a delay to rain/reign, thats an ankle sprain and an uncle slain,
9.some would say, I'm so insane Simply sayin/saiyan
10.I'm not sippin soup 'er/super or living plane,
11.but boarding one off of recordings son
12.I use my fore fathers to go farther, with my Go Yard and gold card for insiders
13.I'm inside her insides from money saved from diaper days and daper ways
14.It wasn't just a phase
15.I'm still out for dead presidents, cause in the present tense
16.They still represent.... me.

Btw, obviously not 16 bars, just did it for numbering purposes..

Word play/line descriptions

1.Girls like a yo-yo- I throw them, they come back. Say "aye ***"- add an "A"/aye to yo-yo= Ya-yo, which is slang for cocaine. They fall in like white snow- Got girls that come in when i say so, and they bring cocaine.
2. I hang with these girls, but they get the wrong idea, thinking that we might become a couple or some sh1t
3. I say what gets me what I want quickly so that I don't get permanently attracted to any females while they are "just in heels"
4. "like bust and peel"- 'Bust' is a double entendre, liking busting their bubble and also f4cking them. Then i peel out the parking lot.
5. "Barking like coughing, but also talking with my dawgs. Bark is weed in this situation bringing 'barking' to a "triple entendre". Buying it from Bob Barkers yacht is just for word play purposes.
6. Timba Tre brings alliteration to my name and also brings to light that i was just smoking trees. I turn to trigga tre because the deal on the yacht went bad, so i kill them for the weed i was gonna buy anyways.
7. 'dont bring your slim figures to me' dont **** with me if you dont have cash. also brings a double entendre to 'I stick figures' buy saying i kill important people, but compared to me they dont have cash, thus being "slim figures" and "stick figures"
8. "delay to rain" I dont **** around, so dont expect me to wait around for you, also my reign in the game is inevitable. saying thats an ankle sprain is saying that you ****ed up and now your gonna uncle is gonna suffer the consequences
9. some people say im insane. "simply sayin/sayian"- double entendre, ima say it plain and simple also referring to the fact that im just a simple sayian, like in dragon ball Z
10. "Im not sippin soup er/super"- double entendre, im not poor but im not a "super sayian" either. Im good but im nothing special.
11. Im not living plain, but im boarding a plane from the money from my recordings.
12. I use money to get more outta life by traveling (go yard suitcases and a gold credit card)
13. I f4ck women because I live my life lavishly from money i got when i was younger
14. getting money wasnt just a phase i went through
15. I still get money now
16. Money doesn't shape me, I use it to represent who i am by giving to others and such

another note, all the lines together are kind of a metaphor for my flashy rapping style.

Anymore thoughts anyone?

bump
just looking for thoughts on lyrics and wordplay, I understand that the audio quality is sh1ttier than your ma's BJs