Title: Away From This Life (leave comments plz)

Rain drops fall on down ceaslessly
Hidding my tears so you can see me cryyy
Pain is written all over my face
all you got to do is take a look
my heart painfuly died
like a withering rose
each day the pain grows

(chorus)
I'm waiting for a train
that'll take me awayf rom this life
My love has died, so has my heart
my body went numb from the pain
watching my loves life fade away in thier eyes
i'm waiting for a train
that'll take me away from this life
away from the pain, from the sleepless nights spent screaming
i'm waiting for a train
that'll take me way from this life
(chorus end)

so many people come to me
asking for my hand, tring to ease my pain
thy're so sweet, intenctions pure
but it'll never be the same
never thesame touch on my face
never the same feeling when they my love said my name
i feel nothing just to numb
not the wind on my face, or the warmth of an embrace
all i feel is the slow painfuly death of a heart
torn in two

(chorusx2)
I'm waiting for a train
that'll take me awayf rom this life
My love has died, so has my heart
my body went numb from the pain
watching my loves life fade away in thier eyes
i'm waiting for a train
that'll take me away from this life
away from the pain, from the sleepless nights spent screaming
i'm waiting for a train
that'll take me way from this life
(chorus end)

i walk these tracks
waiting for my time to come
not afraid fo what lies ahead
the ground shakes the lights shine bright
take me away
dont wanna remain here as my heart keeps bleeding
making me scream an endless scream

(chorusx3)
I'm waiting for a train
that'll take me awayf rom this life
My love has died, so has my heart
my body went numb from the pain
watching my loves life fade away in thier eyes
i'm waiting for a train
that'll take me away from this life
away from the pain, from the sleepless nights spent screaming
i'm waiting for a train
that'll take me way from this life
(chorus end)

Not a bad start I say

Your grammar and spelling could go with being checked, but the lyrics themselves work to a good extent.

There are a couple of points where I find it hard to understand what your trying to say, but most of it works pretty well.

Overall not bad but could use a little bit of work

LazzurusMan