Its not finished but please give me some advice!

Born and baptized in flames of war. A generation that's never seen peace before. Propaganda pumped in me since the age of four. We can't see the light. I can't take much more. This system is broken. It can't be reformed when the rich make the laws and the poor scrub the floors. Democracy is dying its beaten and soar and we can pay it our dues or refuse anymore.

Hi and welcome.

One thing I can suggest is that you write your lyrics in lines.