Friendship is Bullsh*t

bullsh*t mutha ****a you cant treat a *****
like dat im sorry if you hate my rap
all i really want from you si to shut your trap
your a bad guy you went bad like rye
before you want to die let me hit your eye
im a little dysfunctional
i dont mean to get emotional
im a crazy demon your wife wonte be more than
blood and semen
dont think i cant treat him like that
im to right
im out of site
you get out of my site
friendship is bull ship all there are
is haters and lovers
the only reason i hang is my girl or i would die
even my girl would only sigh at my funeral
im the real king of darkness
im gonna tella how to rock in this party
eminem only wishes to get to my level
he think and hes on the brink
beofer that he is gonna have his boat sink
and of course you mom likes my horse
she drives a porsh
you better close the door i hear the cops
they dont rock nether do you
( throws mic )

like and **** im gone.....

"eminem only wishes to get to my level" ha ha ha your joking right?

Keep spittin

JD

..you realise that if eminem's boat does sink now, you're gonna be under suspicion yeah? especially if it's followed by your chart success.
uh. give your horse a sugar cube from me. unless that was innuendo for something, in which case, dont.

oh yeah, maybe work on rhyme schemes a bit but your lyrics are quite decent. definitely do keep it up and put more time in.
can't really see how it'd work on a beat but that's not necessarily a bad thing, maybe I'd have to hear it to get that.
I like the "friendship/bull.." haters and lovers" .to "funeral" section's content most, by far.

I like the I'm a little dysfunctional part to the emotional part because it's Tech N9ne's and not yours. I know don't like any of this rap because I don't know where else you took stuff, and there isn't a rhyme scheme at all. Also, when you rap tell what you actually feel don't front, like do you REALLY think you're better than Eminem? If you're sane, then no. So don't say that. Keep practicing, but make it your own, and don't front.