Help me finish my song and tweak it! and a name would be nice!! thanks!

I don't know how to express
Words are not enough
I can see the shimmer in your eyes
Your smile shines so bright like the moon on a hot summers night
You light up my world like fireflies, on a mid night sky with stars so bright



This is all I have can you help me?! Thank you!!!

I hear true love. It sounds very personal; and I'm glad you shared it.

To me it sounds like a poem . . . that needs just a couple lines to end it, so the high intensity is not left just hanging there.

If you want it to be a song . . . remember that songs/poems sometimes come to us as a "whole". Others come to us over time. Perhaps your feelings and experiences just need to continue "ripening". It is so personal, I wouldn't dare touch it, dear! It belongs to you and the one to whom you are "singing."

Saw you walking,down the street
With some other guy
Whispered something in his ear
Smiled at me,passed me by

Do you think
You're all that
Acting mean and cruel(RAH)
I can't wait til you get dumped
You're not the queen of cool

I've had this verse hanging around in my head for years.If you can use it,fine.If not,at least I tried!