domo in the making (im done)

This Is a demo in the making but please comment and am looking for additional lines if you guys have any to add. This is a metal song.


I'm done

Intro solo

You Keep pulling me under to save yourself
But you didn't know I was already broken
Torn up and torn apart
Use me til nothings left
Now you saving yourself

You can't
You can't
Your so ****ed up,
Nothing's going to change
I've seen it all before

I'm done
I'm done
I'm done
I'm done

I've seen it all before
It all remains the same
nothing's ever going to change
Ever going to change

I'm done
I'm done
I'm done
I'm done

Solo

Same here its been going on for a little while. I usually write better.

Songs without music are just words on paper,just words on paper.Keith Richards in Hail!Hail!Rock and Roll.Keith couldn't have said it better,it's hard to tell,these words,to me,are powerful.If I heard the Metal Power Chords behind them,it could be a monster.But....
That's the problem here at ATL,just lyrics.I don't worry about lyrics being stolen,because the music is up to YOU.

Thanks I will send you a link for the intro and verse