painful home full of painful words
nothing done cause i cant discern
fell behind and cant return
these are more than empty words

my hands
they're not that strong
but my feet
they'll carry on
cause i know
someday,
you'll take me away

aching heart and an aching mind
beaten down i wont fall in line
running fast running out of time
running down a narrow line

and
my hands
they're not that strong
but my feet
they'll carry on
cause i know
someday,
you'll take me away

far from here where the sun is shining
nothing there but silver linings
no more room for empty crying
no more days of wishful dying
the day you take me away

Phil, this is good, real good. The refrain is excellent, the rhythm almost hypnotic. Coming from a drummer, that's high praise!

Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe

Phil, this is good, real good. The refrain is excellent, the rhythm almost hypnotic. Coming from a drummer, that's high praise!

i feel stupid asking this but because ive never really read about song writing or song components or been around muiscally gifted people my vocabulary in these matters is kinda low.... so what is refrain?

The refrain is the part that's repeated,also know as the chorus,but not restricted to "a chorus".the refrain in this starts:
My hands
They're not that strong
But my feet
They'll carry on and so on.

Phil,there are no stupid questions,it's only stupid NOT TO ASK!!I'll answer your PM soon.I'm giving it some thought.

Originally Posted by RickeyJoe

Doug is correct. It may seem lazy but I mirror everything he just said. Lol

I agree with RickeyJoe!

This is pretty good and not to seem redundant, I agree with Doug who agrees with RickyJoe. : )

Oh course Doug is correct he's always right. Any way great song I like the refrain as well it really works with the song as a whole.