
Don't have a name yet :/ Any suggestions?
Thread: Don't have a name yet :/ Any suggestions?
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StripedSweater said:
12-07-2012 01:30 AM
Don't have a name yet :/ Any suggestions?
I think about it all the time
The thing I love the most
It makes me cry
I can't even sing
When you're so
Close I can feel your own breath
I, I...
I can't speak now I'm terrified
I can't sleep
You're on my mind
So if I, see you
I play it off like I don't notice
Do you see me?
Or am I dreaming?
Am I dreaming?
That you see me?
Walk by and I begin to sweat
Nothing can stop this nervous wreck
So when, you ask me if I'm
Busy this weekend I say say say
What should I say say say?
What?
I can't sleep
You're on my mind
So if I, see you
I play it off like I don't notice
Do you see me?
Or am I dreaming?
Am I dreaming?
That you see me?
I feel like a school girl
With her first crush
I want to pour you in my diary
I've said too much
So do you like me?
I think I'm dreaming
I think I'm dreaming
I can't sleep
You're on my mind
So if I, see you
I play it off like I don't notice
Do you see me?
Or am I dreaming?
Am I dreaming?
That you see me?
Last edited by StripedSweater; 12-07-2012 at 11:56 AM.
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Mixalopoulos said:
12-07-2012 01:50 AM
Hi, perhaps "Am I dreaming"

Ρεμπέτικο για πάντα. Μάγκες είμαστε.
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Doug Denslowe said:
12-07-2012 01:34 PM
Before I read Mixy's suggestion,I too was thinking Am I Dreaming.That's the best I can come up with.Or,"Say Say Say"
Also,I agree with Rickey's Comment completely.Not for the reason he gave,it just sounds better.
Last edited by Doug Denslowe; 12-07-2012 at 09:14 PM.
Reason: The Say Say Say Remark
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Peter Both said:
12-08-2012 06:08 AM
Alternative title: 'Infatuation'
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Wilson said:
12-08-2012 07:44 AM
I would love to write a song with you
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Mike SungJi Baik said:
12-08-2012 10:43 AM
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StripedSweater said:
12-08-2012 05:47 PM
I highly disagree with your idea. If I drop "own" the line no longer fits into my syllable pattern. I think it sounds fine, actually i think it sounds great the way it is. I don't shoot for perfection when I create, Mr. Joe. I shoot for me, and from what my others tell me I am very quirky, not perfect. That's why I'm leaving the "own".
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StripedSweater said:
12-08-2012 05:48 PM
@Mike Hmmm maybe. Idk though. It doesn't seem to hold the main idea of the song.
@Wilson that would be awesome lol
@Peter I like that lol
@Doug You always have something very helpful to say haha :P
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VivaPalestina said:
12-08-2012 06:08 PM
What about a simple On My Mind?
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Doug Denslowe said:
12-08-2012 06:48 PM

Originally Posted by
Peter Both
Alternative title: 'Infatuation'
Peter;
This was a big hit Rod Steward had during the disco days.Just in case..........
(Infatuation)
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StripedSweater said:
12-08-2012 08:06 PM
Lol when it's not your creation, but someone else's... you're always wrong
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StripedSweater said:
12-08-2012 08:11 PM
Lol wow. Someone is super full of himself
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StripedSweater said:
12-08-2012 08:45 PM
Lol bro you need to chill. It is good where it is and that's that. No discussion. Good day
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Doug Denslowe said:
12-08-2012 10:20 PM
@Rickey;
Looks like she "owned"you!
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Wilson said:
12-09-2012 08:27 AM
Hey guys.um,i think we all should try to help each other out coz if we were PERFECT,we could already be selling lyrics not just posting them.none is perfect..respect the other to be respected.just honestly comment on the lyrics and humbly tel the writer where he or she can improve,correct,change or add.am a new guy in here.hope u dont mind....thanks all' ya.
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VivaPalestina said:
12-09-2012 09:21 AM
I'd like to point out that this section is called Lyrics Review.
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DeShaun said:
12-17-2012 09:33 AM
To me, the narrator's state seems "Bordering on Delirium."