I keep a lot of ****
to myself
because nobody gives a ****
I'm all alone
in this world I hate
running on fear and luck

It's no mystery
nor prophets lies
why life chose to **** me
God's grace
passed me by
surely paradise isn't real

so when you finish bottom, last
and life has finished too fast
turn, look me in the eye
say to yourself, I'm better than HIM!!!

plague of christ
laughing stock
when there's nothing left to loose
I crawl into a hole
hang my head
my skin trembles at the noose

sever the pain
from worthless flesh
nothing left for me to live for
only fear
of the eternity
keeps me from ending it all

I'm weak but I survive, so...

when you finish bottom, last
and life has finished way to fast
turn, look me in the eye
say to yourself, I'm better than HIM!! and live your LIFE!!

no matter what I feel
this is real
my universe is a grain of rice
no matter how small
with purpose we're born
listen to me
you'r reason to LIVE!!!!!

when you finish bottom, last
and life has finished way to fast
turn, look me in the eye
say to yourself, I'm better than HIM!! and live your LIFE!!

My Atomic Friend;
Powerful stuff.I know you tend to write in the Metal vein,but I really could see(hear)this as a slow,folkish song.Love it to death!I've got to give one little suggestion;Turn,look me in the eye,Say to yourself,I'm better than that guy!Hey,I always go for the rhyme.

cheers for the much appreciated input doug. to tell you the truth i did actually consider having guy instead of him (as i am also a creature of the rhyme) but when i heard it in my head i wanted a word that broke from the rhyme scheme so as to generate a sense of immediacy and force, a kind of pointing finger if you will, not quite accusing but just a kind of statement i suppose. i hope this makes some form of sense!!!! CHEERS AGAIN MY DOUGY FRIEND!!!

Originally Posted by Tomatomic

cheers for the much appreciated input doug. to tell you the truth i did actually consider having guy instead of him (as i am also a creature of the rhyme) but when i heard it in my head i wanted a word that broke from the rhyme scheme so as to generate a sense of immediacy and force, a kind of pointing finger if you will, not quite accusing but just a kind of statement i suppose. i hope this makes some form of sense!!!! CHEERS AGAIN MY DOUGY FRIEND!!!

It makes sense and did have the desired effect.When I read "Him"it did stick in my head and it did make a stronger statement.That being said,if this was to be sung,I'd still sing it "guy"!!!

this song could do well in alot of styles what style where you going for in this peace?

i was thinking something along the lines of max cavalera era sepultura with some mudvayne hurled in there for good measure!!!