Villanelle 3: Clearville.

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    curiosity_kills_the_cat said:

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    Clarity is when you know
    The inner road,yours to take
    a very fine line to tow

    Where ignorance settles to grow
    Wisdom itself dares to shake
    Clarity is when you know

    Seeing the world through a window
    A plethora of choices to make
    A very fine line to tow

    The day checks to a slow
    A bared mind in its wake
    Clarity is when you know

    What makes the heart flow?
    Emotions,whirlpool like a lake
    A very fine line to tow

    Knowledge comes and stays with a glow
    Now robust, formerly as a rake
    Clarity is when you know
    A very fine line to tow.

    P.S I welcome constructive criticism, please feel free to express your opinions. Thank you.
     
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    Cool, I am not very familiar with Villanelle, but I know it can be hard to convey it into something natural that does not halt itself. But I think you did a good job here and I enjoyed it for what it is
    Last edited by Eccer; 03-11-2013 at 06:01 PM.
     
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    Wasn't familiar with villanelles myself until about 2yrs ago, i started writing them because, as you said, it's a bit difficult to convey a message while writing within borders which you must adhere to. It's a little challenge i took up.
     
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    Cool cool, I will consider it myself sometime. Seems very interesting, and it is a challenge to face!
     
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    This is cool!I almost feel like getting towed.
     
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    Thanks Doug, you're gifted, words never desert you, i think.
     
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    Hi! I am especially fond of the clear line of thoughts here, Curiosity I find this one therefore a true little oasis in a desert.
    Thanks a lot!
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by curiosity_kills_the_cat View Post
    Thanks Doug, you're gifted, words never desert you, i think.
    Sometimes I have to eat my words,but never for dessert!
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by amaryn View Post
    Hi! I am especially fond of the clear line of thoughts here, Curiosity I find this one therefore a true little oasis in a desert.
    Thanks a lot!
    Thanks for the comments, it shows you took your time to read through. Very refreshing indeed(pun unintended)
    & you're the 1st to call me "Curiosity", i like it better (Others just call me "Cat")
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by Doug Denslowe View Post
    Sometimes I have to eat my words,but never for dessert!
    That is it! Can you just see this T-shirt on me? I'll let you choose the colour.
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by curiosity_kills_the_cat View Post
    Thanks for the comments, it shows you took your time to read through. Very refreshing indeed(pun unintended)
    & you're the 1st to call me "Curiosity", i like it better (Others just call me "Cat")

    Alors, je t'appelle comme ca, d'accord?
     
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    Quote Originally Posted by amaryn View Post
    Alors, je t'appelle comme ca, d'accord?
    D'accord. Vous etes francaise?