Love isn’t always cute

Times get hardest
Just after the smiles
Love isn’t easy
It why we have trials

Putting in the time
Some times doesn’t count
Effort isn’t the key
No matter the amount

Love isn’t always cute
But it’s worth it in the end
When two hearts beat together
And there souls begin to blend

Love can’t always come first
But that’s how you know its there
When you have to let them go
But still their always there

It sends you a bit crazy
It makes you insecure
But yet our body yearn for it
More, more, more

Love isn’t always cute
But it’s worth it in the end
When two hearts beat together
And there souls begin to blend

Can make you change who you are
And you stop being you
Turn your life up side down
And put your focus out of view

Just remember to keep trying
And to never let it die
You love is your greatest gift
It helps your spirit fly

Love isn’t always cute
But it’s worth it in the end
When two hearts beat together
And there souls begin to blend

I see a good song here with some really good lines. I can't get to a good crit right now because of time restraint at the moment, but I'll be back later tonight or earlier tomorrow to read it again and throw in my 2 cents.

ok bud cheers

TruePerfection,I like this........but I think it could still be improved a little.I like the refrain,some of the stanzas are great,some aren't as good.It's just my opinion,I could be wrong!I think this,with a little thought,could be turned into a real classic!

no i totally agree, its why i put it up here for advice on how to improve it

If I knew of anything to help,I would have suggested it.This is really coming from you.I wouldn't know where to begin.I'm glad you're open for advice,hopefully someone will offer some.

Massive assembly of thoughts. "love isn't always cute" is clear but maybe it could be more sarcastic?? Love is such an elastic word you know. But do as u like! Thanks anyway.

how do you mean more sarcastic please, just so i can see how you would maybe write it since i really enjoy your work

Originally Posted by trueperfectionisimperfect

how do you mean more sarcastic please, just so i can see how you would maybe write it since i really enjoy your work

Thanks for the compliment! Teehee, never thought of it that way. Just as "isn't always cute" seems a true eufemism, why not make it more saucy straight away?
And then again- just voluntarily, as I wrote

Times get hardest
Just after the smiles
Love isn’t easy
It why we have trials

Good lines! They show the ups and downs that always come.

yer i was trying to say things about after the "honeymoon period" of relationships where over and how we go from person to person when young to help us decide what kind of person is out true love