What I've Become

The rain begins to fall
As the sky turns to grey
The ground crumbles
As we fight to survive

Who am i
N what have i become
Theres no hope left
I have to face it
Can't deny it
What I've become

Look inside
See what I've become
Nothing more
Nothing less
What I've become
Is all from you

Who am i
N what have i become
Theres no hope left
I have to face it
Can't deny it
What I've become

Look at what I've become!!!!!

Look inside
See Whats left

Look at what I've become


Who am i
N what have i become
Theres no hope left
I have to face it
Can't deny it
What I've become

I think if you combined this with Save Me,using the "save me" part as the refrain,you'd be on to a great song.I find when I read your songs,they're often incomplete.They're some verses but not often a "complete song".If you put these two together,it may come out rather nice.

Thanks fkr the comment! I tend to write more songs like this to keep people thinking. But i see what you are saying about the two. I will work them.in and delete then repost in the morning.

I see what you mean it does make me think. When I was reading your song I thought about myself asking the same question what have I become. I understand the purpose for the "incompleteness" of this song I often tend to write like this as well I want the reader or listener to fill in the gaps with their own feelings or emotions. I like songs that make me think so I like this one it may not seem like it is complete but I think with some fine tuning it will be.

Yes i agree. I like to write this way and i do have alot that are finished as well. I like to write in two different styles. If someone does not like one style i can fall back on my other.