
please rate my song
Thread: please rate my song
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Jordan Baker said:
01-08-2015 10:37 AM
please rate my song
Chorus (sung)
cos' I can use a hand somtimes
yeah I can use a hand sometimes they say pain is an illusion
this is just a bruise and
you are just confused but
I am only human
I can use a hand sometimes
I am only human
Verse 1 (rapped)
I could use a hand sometimes
another days another struggle in this pain filled life
tryna find a reason to live another night
cry myself to sleep after cuttung with a knife
wake everyday with this sensation of pain
knowing there's not much to lose but a hole worlds to gain
its killing me watching my blood from my vain rain in to the drain cos it relieves the pain in the brain for a brief second making me feel a bit sane
hell man I know this **** is insane picking up the blade, feeling so ashamed but it's me and that I can't change
I really need to fight this mental battle of rage
just no one ever seems to listen
they just moan at me till I fall into submission
so my problems I no longer ****ing mention, need a friend
I could use a hand sometimes
(Chorus)
Verse 2 (rapped)
They say pain is an illusion yeah
well if that's true this is the realist illusion yet
those words you say
of course they hurt
crushes my insides with every word
but on the out I remain strong
tryna correct all the things that you have put wrong
beaten up on the daily
hoping one day Superman will come down and save me
but he never has
so I had to face reality man
no ones ever there at your lowest
its you verses this big wide world
no ones gonna have your back to the bitter end
can't keep pileing your problems on someone else
get up and face the facts
a true friend would be great but I ain't after that
just want someone to listen
if I carry on I'll be better of in prison
at least then I won't get in nobody's way
i could really use a hand sometimes
(Chrous)
Verse 3 (rapped)
I'm only human
but sometimes I feel like I'm a superhuman
notice little things
that most people wouldn't even give a glimpse at
feel a prat because everything I see feels like a trap
worlds out to get me man what's up with that
I know its not but I can't help but feel like it is
everything I do feels a step behind and this
rap is only helping temporarily
once i finish I'll be back to thinking negatively
i know I'm not the best
but I'm not trying to be like the rest
i have my very own method
don't have a great voice but I only rap for the passion
just wanna be heard not loved
but no one gives a **** so I'm ****ed bruv
but if anyone out theres in the same position
just replay my song, give another listen
every time that you feel down, just know that I feel the same too this songs for you cos'
Outro (sung)
I am only human
Last edited by Jordan Baker; 01-08-2015 at 11:27 AM.
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+Technist Barrier- said:
01-08-2015 08:52 PM
+Hi Jordan Baker!
I think that you have dived deep into your emotions.
I also like the rhyming words that you put into your song.
Out of a ten-scale, I'm gonna give you a nine.
Why?
Cos' I don't know.
So I'm gonna give you a ten for those rhymes, repetition, and feelings although I feel like giving you a nine.
Over and out-
+To imagine is everything, to know is nothing at all.>A.France
Oh yeah, I forgot, and always expect the unexpected.

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Jim Colyer said:
01-09-2015 12:48 PM
Never tell a woman that you are only human. It does not work.
Jim Colyer Girl albums
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+Technist Barrier- said:
01-09-2015 05:33 PM
+why ever not??
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+To imagine is everything, to know is nothing at all.>A.France
Oh yeah, I forgot, and always expect the unexpected.

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