Cease-Fire

Hey here was my first attempt at a love/romantice type song. Please give me some criticism.

Love blooms, a thing of desire,
She grooves burning like a fire.
I know I’ve never said to you,
What I feel and you haven’t got a clue.

I want to see you when I’m flying,
The breeze blows and I’m still sighing.
She knows now, decision is deferred,
She supposes that she must deter.

I need to know, what we are here for?
I need to know, why do you shut the door?
You leave me, calling me a liar.
You need me, can we please cease-fire.

I think of her when I’m high,
Through the window a divine sunrise.
Smell the cool mountain air,
I’ve taken all that I can bear.

I need to know, what we are here for?
I need to know, why do you shut the door?
You leave me, calling me a liar.
You need me, can we please cease-fire.

The time is now, the time for us,
You know in your heart, no more to discuss.
Everything is fine and all is sublime,
I feel it that’s why I’m singing this rhyme.

I need to know, what we are here for?
I need to know, why do you shut the door?
You leave me, calling me a liar.
You need me, can we please cease-fire.

I love you; don’t know why I’d stray,
They ask me and I still say nay.
After it all, I could never leave you,
After it all, I could never say adieu.

I need to know, what we are here for?
I need to know, why do you shut the door?
You leave me, calling me a liar.
You need me, can we please cease-fire.


It kills me, a torturous pain.
That you accuse me, but do not ascertain.
I feel the sting, an icy lance,
You say we’ve lost all romance.

I need to know, what we are here for?
I need to know, why do you shut the door?
You leave me, calling me a liar.
You need me, can we please cease-fire.

I call to you, and an answer is heard,
I say I hope you realize that it’s absurd.
A nod, and the quarrel is over,
It’s all over; our war is over.

Just a couple of things... This is 12 verses of which 5 are the chorus. You might want to take out a few, Maybe go 2 verses and then a chorus, instead of every other one. Also, try reading the verses without the chorus in between, to make sure they're in the right order.