Here is another new song (I actually first wrote it a few months ago) that I would love to get some feedback for...let me hear it, both positive and negative...THANKS!
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A couple more died today
Over a thousand totally
Families left in disarray
We're winning is all they say
How long, we're not sure
What the **** are we fighting for?
Years have passed, at least two more
God knows what we have in store
So grab your gun an tan fatigue
Tomorrow you leave for the Middle East
Kiss your kids goodbye
It's your last glimpse into their eyes
A war fought for democracy
A battle, to make the world free
Maybe we're the ones who need saving
From our leadership misbehaving
So grab your gun an tan fatigue
Tomorrow you leave for the Middle East
Kiss your wife goodbye
It's your last glimpse into her eyes
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Wow, awfully depressing really. And straightforward too.
The rhyme was really well done, not too tacky and the meter was very readable.
I like the lyrics, but I can't help but wonder to what kind of music would this be set to? The lyrics sound angry and with the short meter it feels fast, but I'm wondering what you were thinking.