Please Father, Lord. (help me smile) PLZ COMMENT

OK i'm young and this is my first song. Please review and be honest.



I need an assist, PLease lord why do i even exist.
The plane i was flying crashes and burns to ashes,
my life is going nowhere but down.
I've never smiled but i've frowned.
all this sadness is causing madness and insanity.

Please father just smile at me let me know itll be ok
before i do something stupid and then i'll really pay
I don't need this, my life is bad enough,
Father please i cant handle this, I'm not that tough
I need your help, and right now all i can do is
pray for the day i go away.

iI need a way out, an emergency exit,
Just freeze my life please,
I'm on my knees, i wanna be able to sieze
my dreams and wishes,
I wanna swim with the fishes and fly with the angels.

I need your help, and right now all i can do is
pray for the day i go away,
Please father,lord let me smile, It's been a while...
PLEASE!!!!

PLEASE COMMENT I NEED YOUR HELP! THIS IS my FIRST LRYIC PLZ!

Pretty generic christian lyrics.
Advice- you sound juvenile when you use words like 'Stupid' and 'Bad.
Try to use more vivid adjectives. remember 'Show, don't tell'.