untitled so far...comment on this..just wrote it

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  1. allisonnnicole said:

    Post untitled so far...comment on this..just wrote it

    Here we go, life's waiting to begin
    More than anytime before
    We're put together within
    Wanting maybe less or more
    You swear that you were true
    But I knew this would occur
    We are seperate from me to you
    For us, there is no cure

    I thought we were done, seeing love die, but this is just the beginning of our lives

    We deal with this everyday of our lives
    We're not giving up now
    Cuz of some incident that we think will ruin everything
    Really, babe, its just ruining today of our lives
    You think its over now, I'm sorry I'm not giving up

    I was everything you thought you wanted
    But perspective isn't reality
    I say I'm everything unwanted
    Like a story without morality
    We stand still together
    Like a couple of trees
    We seem to stand here forever
    Cuz you will not be leaving me

    I thought we were done, seeing love die, but this is just the beginning of our lives

    We deal with this everyday of our lives
    We're not giving up now
    Cuz of some incident that we think will ruin everything
    Really, babe, its just ruining today of our lives
    You think its over now, I'm sorry I'm not giving up

    We go on and off all the time, oh we end up coming back anyway
    We go on and off all the time, oh we end up coming back anyway
    Do you think it is love?
    We go on and off all the time, oh we end up coming back anyway
    We go on and off all the time, oh we end up coming back anyway
    Do you think this is...

    I thought we were done, seeing love die, but this is just the beginning of our lives

    We deal with this everyday of our lives
    We're not giving up now
    Cuz of some incident that we think will ruin everything
    Really, babe, its just ruining today of our lives
    You think its over now, I'm sorry I'm not giving up

    Just one thing you think ruins it, will really make it better
    I believe in this, it can't ruin everything
    I'm sorry but I'm not giving up
    (Not giving up, not giving up)
     
  2. HellBellsLiveWire said:

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    There is a consistency issue when you say in the first verse that "We are seperate from me to you / For us, there is no cure" and then later "We stand still together
    Like a couple of trees / We seem to stand here forever / Cuz you will not be leaving me".

    At first, there is no cure from them being apart, but then they're together forever. Maybe this is just supposed to show how their relationship is 'on again, off again', but it might be something you'd want to consider.