4 A.m.

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  1. OmegaAlienLR said: 07-09-2008 09:37 PM

    Red face 4 A.m.

    4 AM

    4 A.M. …. Goodnight
    Put away your troubles, turn off the lights

    Sleeping… so sound
    All alone, no one else around

    Hours …pass by
    No, not much sleep tonight

    Wake up… it’s 8
    Hurry, hurry, hurry, don’t be late

    The day…is long
    In your head, plays your favorite song

    Arrive home…alone
    Why are you, always on your own?

    Go out… tonight
    Trying to find someone, who’ll make it right

    3 A.M. … come home
    Still, you are on your own

    Stop for a second … and pray
    that tomorrow, will bring a better day

    4 A.M. …goodnight
    Put away your troubles, turn off the lights
     

  2. LaphiTaphi said: 07-09-2008 11:25 PM

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    I like it! Guess who? =P
     

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    lyricsfromtheheart said: 07-21-2008 08:44 AM

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    Its pretty good but I don't know if it could be a song.
     

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    Acheramee said: 07-21-2008 11:46 AM

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    Yeabh, pretty nice. But, I noticed some of the lines were not all the same number of syllables. There's very important in writing songs and poems, songs especially because it helps them flow. but keep at it.