Lonely

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  1. Fight4nothing said:

    Smile Lonely

    Looking for some advice on making this better


    Working Title: Lonely


    Theres always been a way out
    So no need to be sorry
    take note to my gaze
    you'll see no passion there

    How far i'd go to know your soul
    was a goal that took its toll
    when i'm the ride and youre the wheel
    this cars gonna pull on over

    as your tears begin flow
    and I leave you at your door
    You ask for one last kiss
    lips meet with nothing to say

    ---Chorus---
    i remember you being lonely
    always thinking bout your sins
    so you tell me nothing about you
    when i'm wondering where you've been
    I remember you being lonely
    always a leash around your neck
    now I hear that youve been freed
    Seems you got a taste of the world
    ---Chorus---

    im starting to see the truth
    it was good to be with you
    but as my mind starts to drift
    I realize the flames are dead


    You forgot what I know about you
    and all those temptations we kept in
    all those times ive seen you cry
    and the way you broke my heart



    ---Chorus---


    ---Outro---
    i remember you being lonely...
    i remember you being lonely...
    i remember you being lonely...
    I remember when... we were young.
     
  2. Rabbitdrive said:

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    Hmm...

    It's okay. I suppose it does go with the title albeit very cliché. I like your word usage. Keep it up.