Daises - Even If You Don't Comment On Any Other One Today, PLEASE Comment This!

Daisies

I have a rule that I stick by,
Whether you like it or not,
I’m the one, who picks up the pieces,
That you drop.

Irony wins as I write this song,
The type of song I hate to write,
But when it is necessary,
I will write like I fight.

This is deemed,
As I scream,
For you my love,
I see this,
Is dipped in cliché soup,
I don’t care,
This is a song,
For the victims love devours…

Had enough of this,
Had enough of love,
Strips everyone apart,
From the skies above,
Hazel Eyes,
Azure Blue Skies,
Sitting on a tightrope,
Love decides which way you fall,
Now can you finally hear the Irony call?
Light glows,
It gleams through the air,
But it’s a mirage,
It’s not really there,
You can be ecstatic,
And emphatic,
But before you know,
It all goes to pot,
Loves me, Loves me not?

This is deemed,
As I scream,
For you my love,
I see this,
Is dipped in cliché soup,
I don’t care,
This is a song,
For the victims love devours…

Yeah, I’m a one-woman man,
I don’t see the point of this,
You’re running rings,
On circular strings…

Heart breaks Heart breaks,
A never ending vicious circle,
Cool it down or cool it off,
Welcome Home…

AAAAHHHHHH!!!

I don’t care,
Once again…
I don’t care,
I don’t care.

I know this isn’t the best song I’ve written,
But it’s the first I’ve written for YOU!

This is deemed,
As I scream,
For you my love,
I see this,
Is dipped in cliché soup,
I don’t care,
This is a song,
For the victims love devours…

You can be ecstatic,
And emphatic,
But before you know,
It all goes to pot,
Loves me, Loves me not?

Loves me,
Loves me not?

This was written for alot of people I know actually, but one person in general, going through rough times with love. It would mean so much if you would comment on this, mainly being a very different and difficult style I've tried to create. Thanks.

I can see why you wanted everyone to comment on this, it looks like it took ages to write and it's awesome! I like the line 'I write like I fight' and 'Hazel eyes, Azure blue skies' Now i've read your song, please check out mine, search for threads started by me

Thanks. It was actually because I am planing to try and make it for my friend. I'll read your ones in bit. I've got food on the way atm. Mmm... Baked Potato :P

WOW, i have to admit I do like it.
Especially the lines "This is a song, For the victims love devours" because unlike many songs that deal with love, whether it for good or bad, you're writing it out of personal experience, but to a larger audience.
A lot of love songs are really personal, with the writer directing it straight from them to their target. You're not just saying that you're the victim of what they've done, but trying to relate to others who feel the same way.
Again very nice.

awesome, really. <3

you sing or something? if no, i think that there are some people who'd like to sing this song

you have such powerful words, im preety sure there would be alot of people out there wanting your lyrics for sure!