Please read and review: I know

this song is called I know. It's my first country song I ever wrote and it's about me and this guy, everything written is true, there's also way more to the story, but anyways. PLEASE READ AND REVIEW. I really wanna know what you think of it! I need opinions!


he doesn't know who his dad is
and he doesn't mind
so what if he broke into
a conveniant store once or twice

it doesn't bother him
cause all that he can see
is today and this moment
and even sometimes me

(chorus)
I know
it's been 4 years since, the day that we met
I was in love with him, even back then
I can track back to, the date and the time
I was only eight and, he was nearing nine
if only I could go back, to when it was easy
cause the last time that we talked, he swore at me

I'm lookin forward to
when we can speak again
cause I love hearing his voice
even if he is yelling

I remember when we used to
stay up and text all night
all the funny things he would do
when I would put up a fight

(chorus)
I know
it's been 4 years since, the day that we met
I was in love with him, even back then
I can track back to, the date and the time
I was only eight and, he was nearing nine
if only I could go back, to when it was easy
cause the last time that we talked, he swore at me

he road in the middle of the street
with a bag on his head
I screamed that a car was coming
and he was nearly dead

But now he's got a girlfriend
and always ignores me
just wonder what it'll be like when
I show up on his doorstep!
and say...

(altered chorus)
I know
it's been 4 years since, the day that we met
I was in love with you, even back then
I can track back to, the date and the time
I was only eight and, you were nearing nine
if only I could go back, to when it was easy
cause the last time that we talked, you swore at me----

Well, I am a HUGE fan of country music and I must say this is a pretty good song. I think it has a nice flow and I actually could hear someone like Taylor Swift singing this song, in fact I pictured her voice to this song and it sounded amazing. I love how personal it is and you can tell that this is a person experience of yours. You really let you and your own personality show in these lyrics.
The only thing i have to say bad about it is that i don't especially like the nding of your chorus. It just doesnt seem as impacting as it should be. Normally when I think of country music the chorus really sticks out to me, escpecially the end of it. I just think that if you could change that last line in the chorus that this song would be amazing.

I totally agree, I have an idea for a bridge or just something to add:
I wanna get back
to the old days
when the phone would ring
and I knew it was you
I wanna talk back
and get yelled at
fight for nothing
like we used to
come on kiss me
like you mean it
like you miss me
cuz i know that you do
i wanna get back
get back with you

hey, i like that....it would be good to add too. Try fitting that in somewhere

umm Tracy-Turnblad that is a song by demi lovato and that's her chorus. lol. Anyways thanks for the compliments. And thank you for the advice captianjackle. Yes it was a song about someone I know. I was listening to alot of taylor swift(love her, she's great) and Miranda Lambert(her too) I also pictured Taylor swift singing this song! lol and I know about the end line of the chorus, just can't think of anything to go in there instead. Hmmm. I'll try and fix it. I'll be posting alot of other songs on here and I hope you'll review them too, you've been alot of help. Thanks bye!

Sounds too much much like your thoughts are coming onto the paper and that's good but you have to let the song flow, not just put any old words down.