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    amuser said:

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    And I don’t want you staying forever in this place
    I don’t you falling in disgrace
    Cause I’m the king and you’re the queen
    Of everything we’ve ever seen
    Oh you’re so up and I’m so down
    You are the crowd and I’m the clown

    And I don’t want you involved in politics
    I want you far from all of these *****
    Far from of all those plastic chicks
    Far from the world that lives of beauty tips
    You are most worthfull fight
    You are the beast I see at night

    You introduce so much pain in my heart
    I saw evil in you Wright from the start
    Please bring me back my world
    Give me back my soul
    I’m seeing a hole and I’m about to fall
    You made of me a bug ready to crawl

    I don’t want see your eyes set to kill
    I don’t want you being the puppet of someone else’s will
    I don’t want pretending that you’re glad
    When deep inside you are miserably sad
    I want you to be the girl I picked from the floor
    In want you to be how you used to, goddess and even more

    You’ve morphed yourself
    You became someone else
    You’ve became so blind
    That makes me sad to think you used to be one of a kind
    You used to be everything
    But I will no longer be your king
     
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    Try not to have each line rhyming, it sounds a bit "trying too hard"...


    Have the third line rhyming with the first for example...

    Unless it's a rap in which case these kind of lyrics are all the rage now, which kinda explains the state of music nowadays...
    * Difference of opinion is not argument, only difference.
    * Just because you don't like something, doesn't make it sh*t
    * You are all individual, just like everyone else.
     
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    amuser said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ultimate_Worrier View Post
    Try not to have each line rhyming, it sounds a bit "trying too hard"...


    Have the third line rhyming with the first for example...

    Unless it's a rap in which case these kind of lyrics are all the rage now, which kinda explains the state of music nowadays...
    It's not rap, at all !

    About the rhyming, i don't use to do it this way, but this one, just... came out this way, you know what I mean?
     
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    Any chance you can read what I type, not just look at words...

    Try not to have each line rhyming, [/b]it sounds a bit "trying too hard"...
    Unless it's a rap in which case these kind of lyrics are all the rage now[/b]

    Also, you'll find I gave you some advice on writing lyrics.
    * Difference of opinion is not argument, only difference.
    * Just because you don't like something, doesn't make it sh*t
    * You are all individual, just like everyone else.