The Emptiness

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Originally Posted by zoniq

Ultimate_Worrier

use your imagination for other things to write about like... Serial killers or "through the eyes of a leper" or something... I dunno, anything[/quote][/quote]
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so this is for my friend worrier.. i wrote it about 2 weeks ago i hope you all like it..
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I Fell Into the Emptyness

Bloody drips are falling from the knife
And I wonder how I achieved to this point
I'm standing and I look at you afraid
And I remember our good memories

How dump I behaved
I couldn't stand far away from you
And that's why depraved
And I fell into the emptyness

Teary drips are falling from my eyes
Everything around me is crying and I'm crying together with them
On my knees I hold you tight
And I remember our good memories

How dump I behaved
I couldn't stand far away from you
And that's why depraved
And I fell into the emptyness[/QUOTE]

Those are ok but I didn't tell you to write them, I gave you an example of what the other guy was telling you when he said "be original"... Jesus wept

Jesus, stop being literal.



and here's how you do it proerly...


Megadeth - Good Mourning/Black Friday
Hey, I don't feel so good.
Something's not right,
Something's coming over me
What the f**k is this?

Killer, intruder, homicidal man.
If you see me coming, run as fast as you can.
A blood thirsty demon who's stalking the street.
I hack up my victims like pieces of meat.
Blood thirsty demon, sinister fiend,
Bludgeonous slaughters, my evil deeds.

My hammer's a cold piece of blood-lethal steel.
I grin while you writhe with the pain that I deal.
Swinging the hammer, I hack through their heads,
Deviant defilers, you're next to be dead.
I unleash my hammer with sadistic intent.
Pounding, surrounding, slamming through your head. Yeah!

Their bodies convulse, in agony, and, pain.
I mangle their faces, till no features remain.
A blade for the butchering, I cut them to shreds.
First take out the organs, then cut off the head.
The remains of flesh now sop under my feet.
One more bloody massacre, the murders' complete.
I seek to dismember, a sadist fiend.
And, blood baths are my way of getting clean.
I lurk in the alleys, wait for the kill.
I have no remorse for the blood that I spill
A merciless butcher who lives underground.
I'm out to destroy you and ,I will, cut you down. (Cut you down)
I see you, and, I'm waiting ,for Black Friday.

Killer, intruder, homicidal man.
If you see me coming, run as fast as you can.
A blood thirsty demon who's stalking the street.
I hack up my victims like pieces of meat.
I lurk in the alleys, wait for the kill.
I have no remorse for the blood that I spill
A merciless butcher who lives underground.
I'm out to destroy you and ,I will, cut you down.

It's Black Friday, paint the devil on the wall. [8 times]


Iron Maiden - Killers
You walk through the subway, his eyes burn a hole in your back,
A footstep behind you, he lunges prepared for attack.
Scream for mercy, he laughs as he's watching you bleed,
Killer behind you, his blood lust defies all his needs.

My innocent victims are slaughtered with wrath and despise,
The mocking religion of hatred that burns in the night.
I have no one, I'm bound to destroy all this greed,
A voice inside me compelling to satisfy me.

I can see what a life's meant to be,
And you'll never know how I came to forsee, see, see.

My faith in believing is stronger than lifelines and ties,
With the glimmer of metal my moment is ready to strike.

Death call arises, a scream breaks the still of the night,
Another tomorrow, remember to walk in the light!
I have found you, and now there is no place to run,
Excitement shakes me, oh God help me what have I done?!
Oooh yeah, I've done it!
YEEEEAAAAAAAAHHHH!

You walk through the subway, my eyes burn a hole in your back,
A footstep behind you, he lunges prepared for attack.
Scream for mercy, he laughs as he's watching you bleed,
Killer behind you, my blood lust defies all my needs.
Oooh look out, I'm coming for you!

i think i improved it a lot..whats your opinion?

Those are ok but I didn't tell you to write them, I gave you an example of what the other guy was telling you when he said "be original"

I already put that and you can't improve on Megadeth and Maiden... Sorry but you can't

Slayer - Dead Skin Mask
[(spoken
How Ive waited for you to come
Ive been here all alone
Now that youve arrived
Please stay a while
And I promise I wont keep you long
Ill keep you forever]

Graze the skin with my finger tips
The brush of dead cold flesh appease the means
Provoking images delicate features so smooth
A pleasant fragrance in the light of the moon

Dance with the dead in my dreams
Listen to their hallowed screams
The dead have taken my soul
Temptations lost all control

Simple smiles elude psychotic eyes
Lose all mind control rationale declines
Empty eyes enslave the creations
Of placid faces and lifeless pageants

In the depths of a mind insane
Fantasy and reality are the same

Graze the skin with my finger tips
The brush of dead warm flesh pacifies the means
Incised members ornaments on my being
Adulating the skin before me

Simple smiles elude psychotic eyes
Lose all mind control rationale declines
Empty eyes enslave the creations
Of placid faces and lifeless pageants

Dance with the dead in my dreams
Listen to their hollowed screams
The dead have taken my soul
Temptations lost all control
dance with the dead in my dreams
Listen to their hollowed screams
The dead have taken my soul
Temptations lost all control