Will it happen?PLEASE COMMENT!

This is my second song, probably isnt good, but i need ur responses please comment..

Ive always had a dream to be on a stage, spit ryhmes thatll make the crowd crazy

I aint rapping about girls,money
or weed in this song,
Im rapping about all thats wrong.
And for all you haters who think i wont make it,
Im ready for a fight, and dont try to be tight
with me, ill pop a cap in something tight,
In you.
I steal ur money,jewely and car, ill put a gun in your mouth,
Ill **** up your house.
And trust me the chance of that happening aint that far.

Im not bad at heart,
I just hope my day ends
before it even starts, I dont wanna fall
apart,been doing music since the start.

I hold my heart in this song,
and if you think my lyrics suck, well then your wrong.
Your just a stuckup mother**** that cant understand
where im from, put yourself in my shoes,
Life is just a job, it plays a big roll, so when your worried about me
Dont even bother to ****** Call. YEAH!

please anyone?

haha.. i lol'd