an arms reach

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  1. jw92's Avatar

    jw92 said:

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    silver terminals
    run across the vast desert
    like silver ink spilt over the sidewalk

    in and out of the silver birds
    they flock like somber cattle
    seemingly far from the juvenile
    but truly just an arms reach
    from their mother
    sister
    brother
    father
    significant somebody
    or maybe even nobody
    for them to be free again
    in the giant toy-shop
    to tell stories
    bomb countries
    bake birthday cakes
    break innocent hearts

    across the lonely blue blanket
    like angeles they arrive
    into the silver ink
    to feel the warmth of a heart
    pressed firmly against theirs

    for each has a story
    untold in each sunrise
    pressed against the glass
    to taste their juvenile
    before they are released into the wild
    to burn cities
    paint pictures
    fight winless wars
    like the filthy animals they truely are
    Please review and give feedback on my lyrics!
     
  2. PrinceComedy's Avatar

    PrinceComedy said:

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    Awesome job! I like the mood, but the theme can be a bit more "original"...
     
  3. jw92's Avatar

    jw92 said:

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    Thank you
    Please review and give feedback on my lyrics!