Εphialtes

higihfgoy

Hmmmm.. this is the same as all your other songs (no offense). You said you wanted to write scary music?
Check out these lyrics:
knives out
street spirit
we suck young blood
myxomatosis
(all by radiohead)
not saying that you have to listen to the theme but I thought they would be good inspiration for you.. good luck
btw... these songs are the songs I find most disturbing of all :P

hehe i inspired from disturbed band soooo.. its disturbing :P
anyway..but why this style of writing isnt that good?im gonna check out these songs you gave me and see if they disturb me.. :P .. thanx for the help my friend i really appreciate it

That's not scary, it sounds more like a merry song for children. And your English may serve as a little exercise: who will find the most mistakes.

fall to sleep - "fall asleep"
hunting my dreams - "haunting"
if i will fall again to you - "for you"; also "if I fell .. would" would be better
nightmares i see - no idea, but "see" is no good
i want to saviour myself - "saviour" is a noun, hence "save"?
until the end with you - ??? Possibly "of you", but no good, either

Maybe if you sing it in the fashionable "screaming mode" nobody will understand a single word anyway. That would be okay then ;-)

Bernd

All these thing you said about my English have mostly orthographical meaning..

like haunting,fall asleep,nightmares i see..

when i write a song it just flows from me..after i write it i check for the grammar and stuff but i forgot it..

but the other are correct if im not wrong..

Definition of Ephialtes: Ephialtes is a demon that causes nightmares,nightmare himself..

If i will fall again to you..(he is a demon that causes nightmares,nightmare himself)so i talk to him as a person and parallel the nightmare himself..

until the end with you..(same here)

its not screamo..

That's not scary, it sounds more like a merry song for children.(the exact song i dont want to make it scary i just want it to be catathliptic..

a and thanx for the grammar help i really appreciate it

zoNiq

luckily spelling mistakes woun't do much difference when performing a song.

i dont know how to replace *nightmares i see*..if could anyone help a bit it would be awesome..