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  1. drh521 said:

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    Not my best, but here is a new one. Check my others and comment please.
    This is called Sunshine And The Eternal Sadness

    One look what’s up, one look what’s down
    One look at me, just to toss me around
    I savor your kiss, I savor your touch
    I stole the stars, but they didn’t mean much

    Chorus:
    Sunshine
    Why are you so sad
    Sunshine
    Why are you so mad
    Is life all that bad
    Ah Sunshine
    Sunshine
    Why are you
    Why are you
    So damn sad

    Morning comes as soon as it goes
    Some realize truth, others just don’t know
    Well we lie and hurt, just to steal
    Maybe we’re just looking for a thrill

    Bridge:
    Sometimes the hardest part is easier than it seems
    And sometimes love is a four letter lie
    Sometimes its tough to tell reality from dream
    And sometimes its best to not even try

    Chorus

    Sunshine, darkness is at the gates
    Sunshine, the hours are growing late

    Chorus
     
  2. Nemah said:

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    What type of song is it?Why did you write it like this?
     
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    Berna said:

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    I liked it. I think it's beautiful