Our Goodbyes

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  1. Nemah said:

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    Title:Our Goodbyes

    [Time goes by like a clock
    In the future its a violent end
    As he waits for your time line to run out
    We say our final goodbyes before the last moments]-Chorus

    Theirs not much left here,or at least left to rely on
    A stories been told after the next like a everlasting tail
    Theirs always a end to a story so whens mine
    I'll stand for a while to say my final goodbyes

    [Time goes by like a clock
    In the future its a violent end
    As he waits for your time line to run out
    We say our final goodbyes before the last moments]-Chorus

    In moments you will see why we say our final goodbyes
    In those moments,those goodbyes final come to a word
    Make sure you get them all out till your very last
    Or it might be too late and the clock will tick your past

    [Time goes by like a clock
    In the future its a violent end
    As he waits for your time line to run out
    We say our final goodbyes before the last moments]-Chorus

    By now,a stories been told and the clock has run out
    So in the end all our goodbyes will come out
    Come out before the very last minute.

    [Time goes by like a clock
    In the future its a violent end
    As he waits for your time line to run out
    We say our final goodbyes before the last moments]-Chorus

    The Final GoodByes
     
  2. tsortore said:

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    I know its the title, but you seem to use the word goodbyes alot.
    Try to avoid 2nd tense pronouns ("...YOUR time line...")
    Verse 1 - Do you mean tale?
    Maybe a little hint to who "he" is. It seems like the song's about death so could it be God or the devil? or just death?
    You also use the word out alot I just noticed.