Review

Hello all,
I'm just trying to wrote my first english lyric and to be honnest, this is not an easy task as this is not my native language ;-). All comment's are welcomed. Especially when correct my poor english (grammar,spelling everything..).
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Intro

verse 1

When the sun lay down on the summit,
And the air stream cool down to a murmur
Then, the riders chase the perfect moment
When the wind spirits and soul of flight obliterate my breathy voice
The sound getting louder and louder
After playing on the runaway edge
As my heart will fail over the earth borderline

Chorus

Jump, down the cliff tonight, as angel came from paradise
Fly, over my dreams of kite, flooding the Windshield of my eyes
Where you gonna jump tonight
Are you whispering my name in the edge of death.
Playing your outdoor game, make me holding my breath
Where you gonna jump tonight
Fly, oh baby fly, right to my heart land site

Solo 1

Verse 2

So one day you will fly over, my love
Heading to last frontier, into the dark wings
And we just remember the road we took
When so many fly, without knowing they must land a day
We must keep our eyes open, hitting the sky.
Surfing together, into the wave of paradise
Ridding while we can, journey you and I

Verse 3

At the end it’ll be only you and I
Into the field of Heaven
Or maybe we will reach the sky
As part of the air will whisper to our children’s
While the space will remember our path
We must keep our eyes open when jumping
Over the cliff and life borderline

chorus

Jump, down the cliff tonight, as angel came from paradise
Fly, over my dreams of kite, flooding the Windshield of my eyes
Where you gonna jump tonight
Are you whispering my name in the edge of death.
Playing your outdoor game, make me holding my breath
Where you gonna jump tonight
Fly, oh baby fly, right to my heart land site

Solo 2

Chorus x2

Jump, down the cliff tonight, as angel came from paradise
Fly, over my dreams of kite, flooding the Windshield of my eyes
Where you gonna jump tonight
Are you whispering my name in the edge of death.
Playing your outdoor game, make me holding my breath
Where you gonna jump tonight
Fly, oh baby fly, right to my heart land site

Where you gonna jump, Where you gonna jump, Where you gonna jump tonight
Fly, oh baby fly, right to my heart land site

Final

Fly, oh baby fly, right to my heart land site.