New Song:

I'm hearing all the voices
Of those who let me down
Troubling my mind
All that I have left
Oh, I am afraid that I'm losing that too

So, I'll hide in your silhouette
My refuge, my sanctuary,
Where reality is just a fantasy,
Where I don't stand alone anymore

Struggling to find
The purpose of this
Are you just amused
To see me go through this pain?
Were those screams,
"Save me, save me"
Just a dream?
I don't know
I don't know
Somehow you're all that seems real to me

Blindly, I teeter on the edge of nonexistence
Frightened to make the false step,
Take the risk, make the fall
As distinction between good and evil
Truth and lies
Blurs into oblivion
Blurs into oblivion

So, I'll hide in your silhouette
My refuge, my sanctuary,
Where reality is just a fantasy,
Where I don't stand alone anymore

So, I'll hide in your silhouette
My refuge, my sanctuary,
To conceal the truth that you'll never be there

So, I'll hide in your silhouette
So, I'll hide in your silhouette

I grasp your hand,
But all I feel is air

yo i need some constructive critism

I think it's good lyrics. A bit abstract (I like the more specific stories) but good anyway

thanks

Not bad at all really. The only thing I can really say is that it seems like it would flow a little bit better if you made it "Blurs into oblivion" as opposed to "Blurs to oblivion". It just seems to flow better a little better. Actually this song reminds me of a lot of the ones that I have posted.....either way, good job!

thanks for your advice i'll change that right now