Fire with Fire - please comment

(chorus):
Fire w/ fire
The world is on fire
Higher and higher
Watch the flames grow higher
Fire w/ fire
If that's what they desire...Fire!

If you're lonely and wandrin' through the night
Come to me and i will help u fight
The world today is controlled by liars
Come with me and help me fight

(chorus)

Take my hand and run away with me
To a land where we all are free
There are no heros just you and me
So you know I'll need your help to fight

(new chorus)

Fire w/ fire
The world is on fire
Higher and higher
Watch the flames grow higher
Fire with fire
If that's what they desire
Fire w/ fire
Raise up all the fires
Higher and higher
Make the flames grow higher
Fire w/ fire
That's just what we desire...Fire!

(musical interlude)

Your help is needed for us to win this war
This'll be somethin' ne'er done before
Victory's near, we're on the right track
We just have to keep up the attack (and fight)

(chorus fade out)

i think tht the wrdin is a little off.
try singin it and addin and takin out thin.its just the struckture f the words.thts all.god job.

Edited. Last stanza's a little weak, but this is one of my first lyrics.

Not too bad. I would say use some word play, and compound your syllables a little bit more. But you've got the right idea good job Keep it up. It can only get better. Would you mind posting on my song? I need some feed back as well.

Very motivational and true to itself. If you are not yet through with this piece, take your time and actualize what you want to happen with it, how you want it to sound to yourself and reader.