A little something for the rap heads...

Aye!!!!!....lol...had to step away from the metal(screamo) for a minute and come back to the hood...lol....tell me what you think...

The beat got me filling like im rocky,
on the block with the glock cocked.
Got a nigg@ filling cocky.
See ya cant stop me.
Im invincible,
all black in the night man im invisible,
see i get spiritual,
when i get lyrical,
and ya can never kill my mind only physical,
see i get spiritual,
when i get lyrical,
right before your eyes if you believe in miracles,
ya i can spit at you,
and i can get at you,
and how ya gonna get with "e" that sh@t is pitiful,
ya people ridicule,..
I mean ridicale,
i said pitiful,
i meant pitifoul,
a couple thou in the pocket,
peep the swag in the step,
ya i roll with my folks but my peeps to the left,
and they throwing up the set,
f@ck it its all love,
since i was a younging....shorty wanna be a thug..lol

Stop rapping about being gangster. Thats not all that rap is about.
I like the multi syllabic rhyming near the beginning, but you need to structure your raps into bars, each with four beats, otherwise they can't be rapped and there is absolutely no flow.
Next rap you write, introduce some clever twists and plays on words, be clever with your lyrics. Display you understanding for flow and your appreciation for the english language and the way the words fall of your toungue. Rap is all about establishing ties within your linguistics.

Peace

i dont know if you think that my raps a front or not....but i dont rap about kiling and drugs and i never shot a gun or seen a brick.....i speak on what i know....and if you cant relate then sry.....and also along with meaningful lyrics....comes deliverance...and it flowed perfect to me....you try to analyze to much and hard...who died and made you rap god....lol...