Could you please give me some feedback (: ?

Thread: Could you please give me some feedback (: ?

Tags: daughter, death, glory, lies, war
  1. MaraMacabre said:

    Default Could you please give me some feedback (: ?

    This was written for someone I knew who died in war.
    So its about him, his daughter and the "glory" of war.

    UNTITLED

    I never predicted,
    The worst could happen
    I never saw, the future
    charging towards us,
    in the form of a bullet.

    Every memory we will never see,
    And every word that's left unheard
    Its all behind you, on the battlefields

    Why do we die for our dream?
    And every night why does Helenna scream?
    Why did you die for your dream?
    And does Helenna still scream?

    The future is so unknown
    Now it can never be found
    One stray bullet skimming battlefields
    The past can't be unwound

    How can they call this glorified?
    when they commemorate
    our chivalry whom died
    Modern day knights in camo
    Just as you were

    as you were

    Why do we die for our dream?
    And every night why does Helenna scream?
    Why did you die for your dream?
    And does Helenna still scream?

    Tell me our sins,
    Speak to me of what we've become
    and will you leave the innocent alone
    Tell me where this story begins
    and when does it end?

    How could you?
    Pull a trigger that ends more then one life
    Why are you still fighting?
    For the lies that they're feeding you,
    is it for money?
    is it for glory?
    Just remember, Memento Mori

    To whoever pulled that trigger,
    Always remember
    Your so vulnerable
    On the field, always remember
    Your so minuscule

    The good die young
    and the others die weary
    Blisters formed on an innocent tongue
    On those who did no wrong
    and kept this nation strong.

    Why do we die for our dream?
    And every night why does Helenna scream?
    Why did you die for your dream?
    And does Helenna still scream?

    Why do we die for our dream?
    And every night why does Helenna scream?
    Why did you die for your dream?
    And does Helenna still scream?

    I'm sick of reading the same old lie
    I don't want to see another tainted eye
    Helenna, there's no more need to scream
    You'll meet again someday



    Thanks for answering,
    much appreciated
     

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