So Impure [Feedback Please]

A bit of a change from what I usually write (on the odd occasion that it happens). This is more of a creepy love story. The protagonist goes completely unnoticed by this person. His mind sometimes makes him believe what is happening is real, but it's really just his desire taking control of his thoughts.

So impure
Your looks fill my
Unadulterated mind full
Of sweet desire

Feel my whisper
Fall on deaf ears
Feel my rough skin
Wipe away your tears

It’s just that I
Can’t understand why
You feel this desire to
Slip away

Across the circle
I feel your eyes
Too far from you
Can I come out from where I hide?

The fire inside me
Shrivelled coals in here
It’s hungry desire
To feel no fear

It’s just that I
Can’t understand why
You feel this desire to
Slip away

Gasp in the soft air
Feel it feed your mind
Calm beneath the surface
My hearts desire

It’s just that I
Can’t understand why
You feel this desire to
Slip away


Feedback please

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