24 Hours

Hello, allthelyrics.com. My name is Logan Simar-McDonald, you can call me by my real name or my screen-name, either one works. I am a 17 year-old metal lyricist/vocalist hailing from Reno, Nevada, USA. I've been writing for 6 months now and have recieved lots of positive feedback. Check this one out and tell me what you think:

24 HOURS

This place...
Land of the ignorant devil.
That face...
Haunting me on a new level.
Never...
Never again will I be the victim.

I will not be your victim.
I'm not one to be picked on.

In 24 hours, can't believe how much I've lost.
Won the battle, but at what cost?
It's like a one-sided coin tossed.
And you just happened to call heads.
But believe me, you will tell no tales.
In 24 hours, everything's gone to hell.

A race...
To the tip-top of the food chain.
Make haste...
Or I may find myself slain.

I will not die like a *****, son.
I'm not one to be picked on.

In 24 hours, can't believe how much I've lost.
Won the battle, but at what cost?
It's like a one-sided coin tossed.
And you just happened to call heads.
But believe me, you will tell no tales.
In 24 hours, everything's gone to hell.

I will not live this way.
Being scared every day.
I will not live this way.
One must go, so one may stay.
And I will not live this way.

A chase...
But the tables have turned.
Displaced...
You better be concerned.
Never...
Never again will I be the victim.

Next 24 hours, your existance will be lost.
I don't give a **** 'bout the cost.
Next 24 hours, you're going straight to hell.

Hope you enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it. I will post another as soon as I have 35 views or 5 comments, whichever comes first. Thank you.

I think that the lyrics are alright, but they could be improved with a little less repeating. Just a question, are you in a hardcore band? I'm a metal lyricist myself, not currently in a band, but I am trying to start one or get in one at some point.

Feel free to look at my lyrics as well and tell me what you think.

That's just fine that you noticed the repetition. I meant for this to be a very simple, emotional song and the repitetion is completely intentional.

No, I'm not in a band, but I will start one one of these days and it will be epic (hopefully).

I will look at your lyrics. In fact, I'll do it right now.

Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it.

Originally Posted by aliza

recommend 24 hours show

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24 DVD 1-7

I love 24, but what does it have to with my lyrics? lol

this is probrable my favorite song of all of yours its really good maybe the best one i have read out of all the forums