native speakers please help!

Thread: native speakers please help!

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  1. Hansu-Sama said:

    Default native speakers please help!

    Hey everybody!

    I`m up to go to the studio with my band in order to record a new song. the lyrics are written so we can get started ^^Unfortunatelly we´re not native speakers, so it would be really helpful if you may want to comment on the language aswell, or if you can spot any mistakes - tell me!

    here are the lyrics, thanks a lot for your help


    We're gonna remain as we are
    No matter how hard you try to form us
    You can't hide a star
    Or tell a flower to change it's color
    No way you can ever try
    Cause we don't see why
    We should drift away
    Now listen to what we say

    [Chorus:]
    Tell me why
    I should change my hair
    Don't know who
    Is allowed to care
    Tell me why
    I should change a thing
    And I say no no no
    We'll never stop to flow

    We're gonna do as we feel
    No matter if you like or dislike
    You can't stop the rain
    Or keep a heart from beating
    No way you can ever fight
    Cause we know we are right
    In what we do
    And now it's up to you

    [Repeat chorus]

    Why she stands there in time
    I can love her some day
    Tell me why she, leave me here!
    I can't breathe anymore
    Dady had the head...hang high
    Tell me why, tell me why
     

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