A new song I wrote about a murderer being haunted by his victim, let me know what you think

So, you killed me
You though I was gone
That it was all over
But its only just begun

My life may be over
But your fate is worse
Ill stay with you forever
The killers curse

Ill never forgive you
For what you've done
But I don't wish you dead
You had your fun
Now its my turn
And the worst is yet to come
Your mind is mine
And I will destroy it

My face forever burned
On your brain
My last moments replay
The way I begged and screamed
Now its you who wake up screaming
Im in your room
And I won't stop haunting you

Im not leaving
Im here to stay
A constant reminder
Of what a monster you are
So live with it
Hideous marriage through blood
Forever inside you
Till death do us part

i like this but to keep with the theme of him already being dead you could put
til your death do we part

Thanks for the feedback. I quite like the "till death do us part" link with the line about marriage though, and I think it kinda shows that his victim is still alive inside his head

I'm loving this !

So I thought I'd come Up with a rap, using a few of your lines so it 'sounds' like the same song ...

So U thought I was gone
I say now it's on
Murder me and I'll breathe
Through who you be
The killer's on a spree
But I'm the illest G.,
U see me, I appear in every window
Ya hear my name when the wind blows
And for your info,
I still got an ill flow
I said your mind is mine
Murder me & I kill you in time
You know u crossed the line
But I'm a boss so I'll be fine
Mad styles I combine
Even after I die
See, I'm like a good wine
The older, the better the taste
I wonder,
Do you remember my face ?
'Cuz our story is based
On filth and disgrace
Still I'm here to stay,
Now is this a case of misplaced hate ?
Make you wake Up screaming
Had U thinkin' U was dreaming
But I'm here, hot & steaming
This bxtch is still gleaming
And I will until your very last words
I appear to rehearse your last verse
Ayo, Your fate is worse
It's the killers curse

Thanks for the feedback, really appreciate it, and nice rap I enjoyed reading it, your good

Thanks a lot, you got me inspired for this one .. :-)