I need you to stop - do you like the song?

Hey there.

I'm new here. I've been writing for quite long now and also recorded a few songs on my own. Just would like to know what you think about my lyrics. The following do not yet have any music. So is anybody interested in using them? Just let me know, but first of all, tell me your opinion.

Greetz.
samdabam


I need you to stop


Verse 1

There have been so many, many opportunities
And there’s no doubt, I would have given you that precious key.
I’ve smelled rotten judgement though, creeping there inside your brain;
Dripping slowly, dripping surely, burning just like acid rain.

Prechorus 1

I used to wear indifference, but that coat didn’t fit me right.
Nor did the umbrella of repression, I’ve still got my pride.

Chorus 1

The more I understand unlocking would be a mistake
The more I dream and spend my thoughts on you lifting my ache.
I need you to stop soiling the air I need to breathe.
I need you to stop spoiling our dreams – help me believe.
I need you to stop.
I need you to stop.
Oh, Oh, Oh,
I just need you to stop.

Verse 2

There have been so many sighs, so many question marks
And there’s no doubt, the cracks inside make my world fall apart.
You keep doing nothing, raising fury rushing through my veins.
Wolf in a sheep’s clothing: Have you come to me to cause me pain?

Prechorus 2

Your ignorance has made me hide myself behind the doors I closed
When being far away from you was what my heart wanted the most.

Chorus 2

The more I understand unlocking would be a mistake
The more I dream and spend my thoughts on you lifting my ache.
I need you to stop turning my eyes into wide seas.
I need you to stop spoiling our dreams – help me believe.
I need you to stop.
I need you to stop.
Oh, Oh, Oh,
I just need you to stop.

Bridge

It’s twisted and it makes no sense, it makes no sense at all.
It’s what they’re calling gravity: jump off, but you should know you’ll fall.

Chorus 3

The more I understand unlocking would be a mistake
The more I dream and spend my thoughts on you lifting my ache.
I need you to stop whisp’ring so hurting carelessly.
I need you to stop spoiling our dreams – help me believe.
I need you to stop.
I need you to stop.
Oh, Oh, Oh,
I just need you to stop.

I like the bridges the most. There is much emotion in all the bridges and I think it gives the song more of a character. It truly shows the emotional load of the lyrics. And the the chorus it's also good but I think the difference between only good lyrics and great song is to be made with the music. If you find a good sounding tone and arrangements for the song it will be a great piece of music. Oh yeah not to forget the verses are also great , i can really appreciate the metaphors you use. I think using good metaphors is a skill that every good song writer should have and in this song you're doing it. I would like to read more of your work. Overall , in my opinion this lyrics sound really really professional , so they're top notch

This is so beautiful!

Thank you very much! I'll post some more of my lyrics and have a look at your work.

Greetz,
samdabam