My lyrics ... Please tell me what you think :-)

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Originally Posted by Aave

Once upon a wishful night
A raven's out for weak and blind
Mighty beast from the nightly shore
Raven lord named 'Nevermore'

Searched the raven, for hopeless souls
Damned prisoners of broken rules
Then I found him at my door
Raven lord named 'Nevermore'

'Who has sent you, Lord, to me
Shall I meet the Heaven's Queen?'
Standing at my chamber door
Quoth the raven, 'Nevermore'

Another riddler arosed in me
'Shall I go to Hell indeed?'
As I just stood at the door
Quoth the raven, 'Nevermore'

More then ever, I felt anger
'Fly away now hellish stranger!'
Shouted at him at my door
Quoth the raven, 'Nevermore'

Weakness caught me, so suddenly
My heart beated, I felt hardly
I hoped I feel this pain no more
Quoth the raven, 'Nevermore'

As the weakness just grew stronger
Easy breathing then no longer
'Will I get up from the floor?'
Quoth the raven, 'Nevermore'

Once upon a midnight dreary
While I pondered weak and weary
I had my soul caught by that shadow
I shall return never-nevermore!

The thing I like about this song is that is open to different interpretations. I can think of a thing or two why you wrote the lyrics and your personal emotion behind the words, but I'll be getting it wrong. I'd rather interpret the song my own way and the words and the way the song is written makes it possible, so that's a very good thing meaning your lyrics are good. I also appreciate the dark heavy emotions behind the words, so maybe a suggestion when played some parts of the song can be screamed out instead of singing them. I think it would at to the that dark emotion transforming the lyrics to a great piece of music. So I like it very much the title especially and the raven makes the metaphor all complete. I red an other of your songs Longing & the ocean I like that even more , I'll leave a comment behind maybe later on. Keep the good work and you do play an instrument I assume , maybe you already have the fitting music, if so please tell me about it the chords, arrangements, strumming pattern etc.