Hottest Thread in Poetry!Wow,good work!
Hottest Thread in Poetry!Wow,good work!
omg lol......i don't even know what to say now except thank you again!
But ofc the biggest thanks go to my Moonster <33 for posting this bcs i don't think i ever would have....
Music is what feelings sound like
Listen to the Love
~♥♥~
Thanks mexico62. I just wish everybody could be so blessed
There is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
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Rockers Unite! => ROCK 'n' Roll Halls of Fame
Thank you amaryn for the "bump" (lol) and i just mean the reminder, bcs have you ever done something and then didn't even recognize yourself when you look back on it? Ofc i do know exactly why and when i wrote this, but writing poetry is so new for me that it seems foreign, and even beyond me. But this is still my favorite of all that i've tried to write and so thank you again for bringing this back into my mind
Music is what feelings sound like
Listen to the Love
~♥♥~
I love this.
The thing with poetry is, what works for one may not work for another, and what is perfect harmony for one may not be the case for another. Also, artistic license is pretty much always employed not to mention different interpretations depending on the individual.
I'm a terrible poet - so likewise it makes me a terrible critic (terrible as in mean not awful), however, I only ever critique what I think is good quality, so if I have something to complain about it means it was pretty damn good to start with.
That's an indirect apology to the complaint I'm about to lodge now
The pause between head spinning, cold heart sinking makes me feel like there is a slight break in the rhythm, it's perfect but seeing as you're working on rhyme and the the following line in the stanza has more meters, i've broken up in colours, the second line not only has more stressed (/ - or in this case coloured) syllables, but also two additional unstressed (x - uncoloured) syllables.
I'm being extra, but the poem in its entirety flows to me, just still trying to get my head around the first stanza as its not a repeated pattern, you only do it in the first line, so it draws attention to it, I'm not sure if that was your aim? Or it just happened?
Perfect...I love this...its such a perfect octometer, and the natural break makes the reader more empathic
I love the imagery behind this
Btw M I dont believe you. This is too good for a beginner
Out of curiosity, would you say the poem came naturally to you, or that you forced it with hard work Tess?
Thank you Viva for taking the time to read and comment and i hope to enjoy as well yea the first line is a lil jerky but when i first wrote it that was what i wanted......but now seeing that i was and am still learning.....
this did come easily after i got a good start.....bcs if that does not happen then i cant finish it and there is one that i started 2 weeks ago but i just can't get past verse 3......so idk if i will ever finish it
But tysm for the critique and everything, and no one has to be a poet or songwriter to just know what they like or may call great or not
Music is what feelings sound like
Listen to the Love
~♥♥~
I'll quote myself just now to M (because I'm that awesome I'm actually quotable)
"The best thing about poetry, is that it's a little part of you. Nobody can say its wrong. It's just you." - VivaPalestina
"...telling everyone who doesnt like your writings, 'I'm doing it for me not for you'" - also the famous VivaPalestina
Dont give up on the one you started, some times, when you force yourself to write, even though you feel completely uninspired when writing it, i've realised people tend to love it thats why I asked, some things flow, some things feel forced, and sometimes the forced things that you feel are totally fake, come out sounding even better.
I'm still working on my first cup of coffee, so it took me several long minutes to digest that one single simple thought. But I'm ok now.
(Hint: Small words and very simple sentences would be very helpful and welcome for the next hour or so )
Quoting an unnamed source:
"The best thing about poetry, is that it's a little part of you. Nobody can say its wrong. It's just you."Absolutely!"...telling everyone who doesnt like your writings, 'I'm doing it for me not for you'"
Btw, Viva, did anyone ever tell you that you're very quotable at times? Just saying, just in case you didn't realize that.
^-^
Just thought that was worth saying again
There is no glamour in sudden death, and nobody ever wins a war.
:
Rockers Unite! => ROCK 'n' Roll Halls of Fame
[QUOTE=Teshka;961977]@Doug, well one other thing is that he's got a really nice car with a rocker-monster sound system!
How's the car holding up?What's he's listening to on monster sound system?
lol it's doing fine and the last i heard it playing was some bad-*** techno
Music is what feelings sound like
Listen to the Love
~♥♥~